DEAR Nicodemus, looking at your essay I would firstly like to say that your structure of the essay is unclear and not really answering the question. The essay question requires you to state and explain the two arguments the writers of the article used to support their case. The case that the question is talking about is to call for greater use of natural ecosystems and biodiversity to slow climate change and its effect on people. However, your essay does not answer this question to a large extent. Your first argument states that it is cheaper to maintain REDD than to actually try to achieve what REDD by going around it. This is a valid point but not clearly explained. You should have stated why it’s cheaper and easier to maintain the REDD so that it is then a good argument on slowing down climate change. Your second argument states that if biodiversity and natural ecosystems disappear, eons of natural innovation that could yield breakthroughs will disappear too. However you did not state how this point will have any effect on people.
In conclusion, I would advise you to plan your essay properly into two of these three points. They are that maintaining the natural ecosystem is cheap and easy, the natural ecosystems provide protection for the livelihood of people and that the natural ecosystems can store carbon emissions in them. Lastly your language, grammar and citations were splendid. Good luck on your final draft.
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