Dearest Sanjeet Singh,
The content of your essay, in my opinion, is that substantial and issues discussed are in line with what the authors of the article are writing. Although, there is a sentence which i am unable to make heads or tails of. You wrote, "Furthermore, Appalachian Regional Reforestation Initiative (ARRI) belonging to USA to plant 125 million trees." So are the trees going to be planted in the USA or in India? I being clearer on this point. As for your organisation, i feel that it would be better if you are able to give the readers a rough idea of what are the main points you will be discussing in your essay in the introduction. Sentence coherency was good which allowed for easy reading. Ideas are put across well in the paragraphs, though i felt its was more of listing examples than discussing the geist behind the authors arguments. Also, paragraph 4 is not really needed as only 2 arguments were required of you. Other than that, language use was good. The style of your writing makes for easy reading. Another area I feel you could improve on is the length of your essay. It is to lengthy even though it is easily read. The question only requires half of the length you wrote.
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